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Piece by piece, I’m torn apart
… and scattered by the wind
Slowly beats my battered heart
Of burden, blame and sin.


All garments of a soul I knew
Reeking pain and hate
My eyes, a dead and darkly view
Crying tears too late.


A longing for a love, a truth
A thirst too strong to quench
Seeking lost, forgotten youth
Finds only rotten stench


Memories, a foul aftertaste of ash
A gentle ache often felt
Emotions mingle, entwine and clash
Such is the life I’m dealt.

©2007-2009 ~moonlitLeera
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Author's Comments

A friend of mine this the final stanza should read as :

"Memories, a foul aftertaste of bile
A gentle ache often felt
Emotions mingle, entwine and entrial
Such is the life I’m dealt."

Which do you prefer?

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Personally I prefer your ending over your friends. they both are good, but i believe that YOUR the one who wrote this not you friend, so they have no right to even suggest a change to the last stanza. :)

--
Oh how I wish
For soothing rain
All I wish is to dream again
My loving heart
Lost in the dark
For hope I`d give my everything
-Nightwish "Nemo"
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i distinctly remember telling you once you were a genius...Glad to see you are living up to the reputation!
WOWEE!
(Yes, I realize this is old, but I haven't been on for yonks(If that was a word))

--
Facito aliquid operis, ut te semper diabolus inveniat occupatum - Always do something, so that the devil always finds you occupied
=St. Jerome=

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